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Kahli - red bardot 2 by wildplaces Kahli - red bardot 2 by wildplaces
Stunning central coast model Kahli

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Ok, so I don't do critiques very often on the "critique" box, but this makes me want to fill in one.

This is an absolute gorgeous lady, the lighting is beautiful, the clothing are perfect for the environment, and the background looks very nice and natural. The composition follows the rules of third if you want your viewers to focus on her body, but I think I'd have zoomed out to show her whole self, or zoomed in to follow the rules of third to focus on her face. That is, if you wanted to follow the rules of third anyways.

The one thing that bothers me about this image, though, is the young lady's pose. As beautiful as she is, she looks a bit of a disturbing sight, and very stiff. As a 3D user who has much experience in posing characters to look natural & relaxed in images, I think I get what this stance is supposed to be. Her shoulders are stiff while pointing to the front, she's trying to stand perfectly (or possibly in the side way "S" curve) but her torso is bent forward while her chest is sticking out, and her neck is bent back while her head's bent forward, making her look too trying. Also she doesn't look happy here, I can see too much concentration going on here.

I would've had her to first make sure she is balanced on her feet, relax her shoulders a bit while having them positioned back some, as well as unbending her torso and chest, all to make it a more relaxed look (while making them an "S" curve if that's what you wanted). Also I would've asked her to relax and give up a hint of smile or flirty expression, or at least a relaxed expression. Maybe crack a joke or say something cute would've helped.

Over all I think this is a nice photo, but it would've been nicer if she looked relaxed then too concentrated.

...wolfie

PS, not sure what "Vision" or "Originality" means but overall the rate is 4 out of 5).
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rustyblood Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014
Awesome expression capture, marvelous !!
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Fosterpython Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Kahli truly is one of the most beautiful of your models.
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hectorbuddy Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2011
I love that top!
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Pheenix42 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2011
Very pretty...but, why no smile? Not the look you were working on?
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SAMIGUY101 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2011  Professional Photographer
Smiles are mosty used in family studio imaages...and this is not one of those.
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wildplaces Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2011
A lot of models have a look they like to present and a smile is not part of that look.
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davincipoppalag Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
so pretty
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Chaosfive-55 Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely!! But where did she get that fascinating ring? Is that a Scarab?
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wildplaces Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2011
Hmmm . . . Don't think so. . . There are close-ups of it in some other shots methinks.
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