OK. If you don't mind I will tell you my thoughts. Don't think because i critique your work that it means I don't like it, I do.
There is no clear point of interest, because the leading lines are ambiguous. This model is beautiful but she has a high forehead. The hair could minimize this in a slightly different pose. I don't feel you maximize her hair enough. Another thing is the eyes are a little too much off center. Really a nice shot though. If the goal is to express a certain look it is not clear in this shot. The "pose" must not look like a pose. I'm just jealous, I would love to have time to work a day with a model like this. Working six days a week as a producer I have precious little time for Shoots, and when I do, I do landscape 'cause I video people all week. G
Glad you took it in the spirit given. I think if I was working with the caliber models that you are I would spend a lot of time framing the shot. I know when I'm filming a particularly beautiful shot that I tend to rush to get it, to capture the moment. I've been mad at myself thinking "I know I got it" but at the studio to see it only a 9 out of ten. Kicking myself knowing that the moment is gone, the lens rental returned and the time passed. Sorry to ramble. G